My former Enrich 1 students in room 309 now meet me again in Enrich 4,
you are at the end of your journey in our English teaching
institution...good luck for the essay writing ....I wish you well ^^
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As promised [yesterday in class], I'm putting up this post so you could consult about your essay writing task. Feel free to write comments and consult about your work. Btw, these pie-diagrams below are just for fun....see if the descriptions fit you ....LOL....
PS. Procrastinating can also be changed to FB ^^
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whooa finally I found my intro. Actually I want to post it last night. But I just found it
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Nowadays, technology life beside us. We are inseparable wth technology. Almost every task we can do with technology. Washing, typing, communicating, and much more activities we do with technology. Technology makes our life easier and better in almost every section. The most advancement technology that today we infer is in mobile devices. Netbook and tablet pc are one of them. They are developed very well. We can find one of these things very easy beside us. But you know what? Tablet PC is better than netbook in portability, interface, ability and price.
oh that's all. please help my intro
Wisnu Wicaksono HI-4 Friday R.309
Hi Wisnu !
ReplyDeleteOver all your introduction is not bad. But I think the narrowing down of your topic is too sudden :
Technology ---------> the portability, interface, ability and price of Tablet PC and Netbooks
Before the Thesis Statement you could write about the functions of Tablet PC and Netbooks [for work, communication, entertainment etc]. You could also mention why people like Tablet PC and Netbooks [over other similar gadgets]. Keep the information about Technology brief.
OK, please rewrite and I'll correct your introduction on vocabulary, structure and etc in class later.
Good luck.
introductory 2.0
ReplyDeleteNowadays, technology life beside us and become inseparable. Entertaining, working, communicating, and much more activities we do with technology. The most advancement technology that today we infer is in mobile devices. Netbook and tablet pc are two of them. Many people love them because they provide “something special” than other gadgets. With these, you can work, communicate and even entertain yourself anywhere and anytime with your hands. We can find all of these things very easy beside us. But you know what? Tablet PC is better than netbook in portability, interface, ability and price.
how about that one? Wisnu W
Hmmm....much better...Ok, Wisnu, I'll correct it completely in class today^^
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