Hi to my former Comet 2 students...remember book reviews? ...well...only Bimo submitted one here, but because I'm re-organizing this blog, I've put his original work and the correction from me in the comments section of this post. You are welcome to take a peek^^
Here we're discussing the book review by Hendrikus B.S.
[ in case you don't know...it's Bimo !]
[ in case you don't know...it's Bimo !]
Good, great review
ReplyDeleteHe he he....Bimo, great review and awesome comments^^ I'll correct it tonight, Ok.
ReplyDeleteThanks for posting this !
Bimo, I've corrected and scored your book review, please open your email to see it.
ReplyDeleteGood luck for everything :)
Dear Bimo,
ReplyDeleteI've decided to put the correction of your work here, so I've copied your post and paste it in the comments section here also...hope you don't mind me doing it in connection with organizing this blog^^
Your original work :
Monday, March 8, 2010
Comet 2 - Review BY Bimo
"Diary of whimpy kid" is a nice story, but actually in the book itself written that it is not a diary, but a journal. In this book we will see the world of the whimpy kid, it's school life, families, friends, and many more. The story will be told with chronological order from day to day.
Story (7/10)
The story is pretty simple, it will told a story of a normal kid. It tell the kid has been bullied, having fun, and many more. Super simple and easy to understand, good for them who doesn't like read something that hard to understand.
Illustration (8/10)
The illustration is also simple, it almost looks like a stickman. The illustration will help you understand the story, and it is pretty good. It is also make the joke a little bit funnier
Overall
In the end I will tell you this is a pretty good book with a soft story that good for relaxing. This is recommended for all kids and teenagers, 'coz it is simple. By the way this book probably won't give you a good mandate
Reviewed by Hendrikus B.S.
Correction of your book review :
"Diary of a Wimpy Kid" is a nice story, but actually the book itself is written not as a diary, but a journal. In this book we will see the world of the wimpy kid, his school life, his family, his friends, and many more. The story is written in chronological order from day to day.
Story (7/10)
The story is pretty simple, it tells a story of [or about] a normal kid : being bullied, having fun, and many more. It's super simple and easy to understand, good for those who do not like to read something that is hard to understand.
Illustration (8/10)
The illustration is also simple, it almost looks like a stickman. The illustration will help you to understand the story, and it is pretty good. It also makes the jokes a little bit funnier
Overall
In the end I will tell you this is a pretty good book with a simple story that is good for relaxing. This is recommended for all kids and teenagers, because because it is simple. By the way this book probably won't give you a good mandate (??? what do you mean/what do you want to say, Bimo?...is it guiding principles for your life ??)
Teacher's comment :
This is a great job !! But please do not use slang in your classwork, you should follow the academic writing style and refrain from using them in your school work , even though you found them in the passage^^, so words like "kinda", "nah" , "coz"...etc are to be avoided. Of course you could use them in your social/informal writings.
Good Luck on your new class, Comet 3 !!!